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finally, page three of my collaboraborationatioin with :iconpahgiz:!

in case my crappy photoshop skills aren't clear: Angel is 'sposed to be turning invisible and back. Show off!

the last panel is meant to be *Akiraine's Charybdis and *Whothehellisthat's Bait, just the other side of a bunch of trees. Look how close they were! (sorry if I messed up your characters guys)

also: i know the bg is worse than the last one XD
page 1 (by :iconpahgiz:) here: [link]
page 2 here:[link]


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this whole Secret War shebang by :iconkostmeyer:
Angel © :iconpahgiz:
Charybdis © :iconakiraine:
Bait © :iconwhothehellisthat:
Holly © me bitches!

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:iconmhg5:
One thing that struck me straight away was Holly's hair. It looks like a smudge tool (or something to that effect, I don't speak photoshop) was used to an excellent effect as I can't help but look at Holly.
Angel looks as glam as ever, and strangely enough, the mix of her colour scheme with the green works really well.
I can't help thinking that this is subtext, indicating that while Holly might be brash, somewhat stubborn and certainly stands out, Angel fits into any environment and is easily adaptable.
Despite what the artist thinks, I actually prefer the background to this page to the background to his previous page. You know that the characters are in the jungle and most importantly, the focus is on the characters.
One suggestion I'd like to make is that, since this is a jungle, maybe a few little effects might add to the unusual environment. Maybe a little hazy blur to indicate that this environment is hotter than what the characters are used to, or maybe some tropical birds flying in the blue sky in the background. Or even if a character wafts their hands at a large group of flies.
Or maybe a random parrot? Too much? Maybe. But the little details of the undergrowth in panel 4 is very effective, so maybe just a few little details will just add to the sense of being somewhere that's more of a jungle and less like Centre Parks. Not that I'm saying this looks anything like Centre Parks mind! This is definitely a jungle!
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:iconkostmeyer:
Yay! Looks great! :D Holly's a great character and your stylish art is great as always! :D

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:iconradsavij:
well shurcks! XD

i must resist the urge to pester you to do the pages for the next one.... it would highly inappropriate! ;p

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:iconkostmeyer:
LOL - Didn't resist too hard, did you! LOL! This weekend - all will be revealed!

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:iconspeedslide:
Way too harsh on yourself, mate.

Your style is always a treat to see in comic form, and the backgrounds look great. Not to mention, Angel's transition from invisible/semi-visible/visible is very convincing.

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:iconcartoonray:
Hey brotha...this looks amazing. You got some awesome "Photoshop Kung Fu" this is the thing about Deviant. It is a great place to practice...I still believe you got the skillz to pay said bills :D

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:iconpahgiz:
Amazing!!!!!!
And still you are too harsh on yourself!!!
You're really good artist and that Angel turning invisible and everything is just great!!
:iconradsavij:
:D thanks, I'm glad the invisible thing turned out ok!

and I have ti be harsh on myself, or I'll never improve! everyone on DA is way too nice to me :lol:

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:iconradsavij:
fo shizzle ;p

thanks for that dude, DA is ALL about the practice, about getting the encouragement and the criticism and the help from your fellow deviants.... well for some people it's a way to make money, but maybe one day I'll get there :D

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:iconradsavij:
i dunno, I think everyone should be their own greatest critic, and stamp out complacency :D

thanks for the kind words, i'm glad people approved of that invisiableness XD

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